Tuesday, October 26, 2010
Practice Cat #3
The article ''The net is the real world'' by Jake Simms and Larry Madid. The authors claim that invading other privacy is wrong and could end in tradegys.They give several reasons why invading others can lead to traragys. Firts, Dharun Ravi and Molly Wei were found guity of invating Tyler Clementi pravacy. Ravi activated a wed camara in the dorm that Ravi and Clementi share. Clementi ask for the room till midnigh and Ravi went to Molly room turned on the camara and saw clemeti making out with a dude. Images of Tyler and the man were spread out live on the internet. Clementi had jumped from the top of the Georgina Washington into the Hudson River. New Jersy's privacy law makes it a crime to trasmit or view nude images or sex acts of someone without the person approval Rutgers students were upset and one said ''It my private space'' i expect my privacy to be respect and to be able to do what ever i want.. There should be no one invading my pravacy. Secound Anne Coller pointedout that this story is not about technolgy, but inhumanity. Grag Sandoval made a similar point he said that humans, not machines are responsable for clementi death. Third professor Jonh Suler put it in his free1996 online book ''The psychology of cyberspace'' were people say and put things in the cyberspace that they would not ordinary say or do in the face to face world. It was real for Tlyler because real people were witnessing an intimate act from his dorm room that he had right to assume was taking place in private. In my opinion i think that it inrespectful to invated others privacy because it something personal that people dont have to care or know about what they doing or were they are at. The athors explaned that invating others can have an negative effect like the story of Clementi. A personal experience that
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I like that you are very detailed about your essay. I like that you started off your essay with the title and the author.
ReplyDeleteI recommend that you give more of your opinions. I think that you need a dictionary by your side because you miss spelled web camera you put wed and you miss spelled second you put secound. Pointed out is 2 words not 1 and Traragys is not a word. This essay is not an essay it is a summary. I think that you need guidance on how to make an essay. You didn’t separate your summary from your opinions. I recommend you underline your thesis and the author thesis and that you put more response to the thesis.
You must work grammar. You must have a strong thesis and have the author thesis. You must see your teacher about this essay or summary. You must have at least 400 words. You must have your own words in a summary. You must not have personal opinions in a summary. You need to have a point in your essay. You need to have examples in your response.
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ReplyDeleteI like the quotes you used from the article but you need to explain it further.i recommend you put your essay in paragraphs and also using a dictionary will wont be bad at all.i also recommend you check your spelling.you must really have a main point when writting an essay.your entire essay is like a summary.you need like 400 words in an essay and it must be in yor own words.try and add some examples to yor essay.your thesis statement is unclear and you must really work on organization because your essay is all over.
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